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Re: My Butterfly
Ok, so this probably isn't my best work, but I'll post it anyway. I'm just glad I wrote a halfway decent poem. A speck of color Sits on a flower ...
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Re: Tourist
Tourist The first thing that strikes you Is the heat. The unrelenting Punishment of the sun. The smells of Opium, incense and dust smother you In a suffocating blanket. Everyone ...
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Re: Every Holiday is Halloween
[pre]Come time to wrap the presents, Christmas, Valentines, birthdays, anniversaries, people have tendencies they normally don't. They put on the masks of generosity and happiness, while they delve de
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Re: Blue Manhattan
I like how it provides detailed stuff, but, it can be a bit better. I like it, but add more detail in it. Keep up the good work! -Rick
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Re: Toy Boat
I remember sailing across the oceans, finding myself lost and drowning until your hands picked me up and became my guide, my sanctuary. I happily sailed through your tub of ...
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Re: I Fear thee whom I loved
I am reading Twilight right now finally, and this just popped in my head. I Fear thee who I loved By Angel of Death I fear thee who I loved ...
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Re: Spay and Nueter your pets
How does this inspire people? It doesn't make any sense. -Rick
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Re: My man
Excellent poem. I really liked this. It's suitable enough for school. I'm sure everyone will love it. Keep up the good work! -Rick
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Re: Sing Softly--so
Erm, not really good with the rythm and words. I think this needs to be revised. Good luck with any future work, Keep up the good work! -Rick
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Re: Clouded care
Welcome to YWS. I really like this as a starting poem. Keep up the good work, and I'm looking forward into checking out any future work you plan on doing. ...
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Re: Don't Long to be a Chart
Hmm...Via, it's good, but it didn't really peak my interest. I think it can be done better. Keep up the good work. -Rick
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Re: No More (I'm done)
I want to take up my thoughts of you and throw them in a fire to watch them slowly burn. I want to rip out your heart, tear it slowly ...
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Re: subtle-pretty
to gouge this grainy wind which walks so free, (proving life's existence with no intermittance) would be so icily cruel, like the bladed sun which shakes and breaks the gossamer ...
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Re: Post-Op
This is amazing. I really liked this. Keep up the good work! -Rick
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Re: My Bands Lyrics by Benny
[pre]Why! Is it so, that you go, leave me all alone. Blind! It's not my fault that I'm not worth you, you make me feel so alive, but then you ...
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